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Thanks for looking, comments appreciated.


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  X-Pro1    35mm    f/8.0    1/250s    2000 ISO    0.0 EV  



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Apr 21, 2017 at 12:15 AM
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Bob,

Not sure the 'extra' stuff around the flower is helping your cause.

Otherwise I quite like the comp and how the hibiscus "pours" into the frame.

Normally I think I'd like that hotspot in the center toned down some, but it does a really nice job of grabbing my eyes and keeping them moving around the flower itself. Black negative space acts as a nice corral as well.

Curious to see a rework with the abstract bits surrounding the flower removed.

Cheers!

Jeff



Apr 21, 2017 at 01:37 AM
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p.1 #3 · p.1 #3 · Hibiscus


Love it, but i find the flower in the bottom left draws the eye.
Great texture!



Apr 21, 2017 at 01:38 AM
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p.1 #4 · p.1 #4 · Hibiscus


Very nice, as a compromise, I would suggest cloning the stuff lower left and upper right. Or maybe burn them down. The stuff behind the flower does not bother.


Apr 21, 2017 at 02:31 AM
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Very nice but yes, out with the lower left and probably more, especially upper right

Scott



Apr 21, 2017 at 02:39 AM
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Love the comp and angle on this Bob, great detail in the petals.

Cheers Ray



Apr 21, 2017 at 07:38 AM
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beavens wrote:
Bob,

Not sure the 'extra' stuff around the flower is helping your cause.

Otherwise I quite like the comp and how the hibiscus "pours" into the frame.

Normally I think I'd like that hotspot in the center toned down some, but it does a really nice job of grabbing my eyes and keeping them moving around the flower itself. Black negative space acts as a nice corral as well.

Curious to see a rework with the abstract bits surrounding the flower removed.

Cheers!

Jeff


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Vibro wrote:
Love it, but i find the flower in the bottom left draws the eye.
Great texture!


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ben egbert wrote:
Very nice, as a compromise, I would suggest cloning the stuff lower left and upper right. Or maybe burn them down. The stuff behind the flower does not bother.


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sbeme wrote:
Very nice but yes, out with the lower left and probably more, especially upper right

Scott


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Dougo wrote:
Love the comp and angle on this Bob, great detail in the petals.

Cheers Ray


Thanks everyone - cleaned up version below. For some reason I never seem to go the extra step, rather wanting to leave some type of visual anchor which is often distracting. I appreciate your help in this.

Bob









Apr 21, 2017 at 11:55 AM
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Apr 21, 2017 at 11:56 AM
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p.1 #9 · p.1 #9 · Hibiscus


The final images is outstanding


Apr 21, 2017 at 01:43 PM
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p.1 #10 · p.1 #10 · Hibiscus


Great detail and texture shining through Bob!
Douglas



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p.1 #11 · p.1 #11 · Hibiscus


It really pops now. Nice image.


Apr 21, 2017 at 03:59 PM
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Most excellent!


Apr 21, 2017 at 04:08 PM
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Very nicely done. You've given it a real 3D look

Dan



Apr 21, 2017 at 04:19 PM
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Excellent shot Bob! The way the stem appears from the darkness into the flower gives it a sense of emergence. Great job with the exposure too! Well Done.

For what it's worth, if it were mine, I'd be tempted to paint out the rest of the unessential elements and maybe extend the canvas on the left just a tad, just to give it a little more room. Just my $.02

Greg



Apr 21, 2017 at 09:36 PM
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beavens wrote:


Thanks for the suggestion!

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lazlo369 wrote:
The final images is outstanding


Thank you Lazlo
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douter wrote:
Great detail and texture shining through Bob!
Douglas


Thank you Douglas
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ben egbert wrote:
It really pops now. Nice image.


Thank you Ben
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Jim Dockery wrote:
Most excellent!


Thank you Jim
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dswiger wrote:
Very nicely done. You've given it a real 3D look

Dan


Thank you Dan
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gregfountain wrote:
Excellent shot Bob! The way the stem appears from the darkness into the flower gives it a sense of emergence. Great job with the exposure too! Well Done.

For what it's worth, if it were mine, I'd be tempted to paint out the rest of the unessential elements and maybe extend the canvas on the left just a tad, just to give it a little more room. Just my $.02

Greg


Thank you for commenting and the suggestion, Greg

And again, thank everyone!

Bob



Apr 22, 2017 at 12:28 PM
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p.1 #16 · p.1 #16 · Hibiscus


Very well seen and processed.

Paul



Apr 22, 2017 at 03:19 PM
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p.1 #17 · p.1 #17 · Hibiscus


Really beautiful shot. Love the texture.


Apr 30, 2017 at 05:55 AM
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DrPaul wrote:
Very well seen and processed.

Paul



Thank you Paul!

Bob
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koarks wrote:
Really beautiful shot. Love the texture.


Thank you, happy you enjoy the image,

Bob



May 02, 2017 at 12:27 AM
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p.1 #19 · p.1 #19 · Hibiscus


Wow! Great flower image Bob! The second one - slightly reworked - is much better. I love it! My only slight critique might be that to my eyes there is just a tad too much negative space on the right while not quite enough on the left. Obviously, you don't want to center it but perhaps you might want to play around with extending the black on the left and then cropping a bit off the right. Try it an see if you don't like it better. Besides that, though it is a fantastic capture! Bravo!

All the best,

Endre



May 14, 2017 at 07:50 PM
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Strad wrote:
Wow! Great flower image Bob! The second one - slightly reworked - is much better. I love it! My only slight critique might be that to my eyes there is just a tad too much negative space on the right while not quite enough on the left. Obviously, you don't want to center it but perhaps you might want to play around with extending the black on the left and then cropping a bit off the right. Try it an see if you don't like it better. Besides that, though it is a fantastic capture! Bravo!

All the best,

Endre


Thank you Endre,

Is this more what you had in mind?

Bob









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